Old Pros

Here’s
a George V. Higgins guy talking:

Never
did like Nino.   Most guys I’ve done
business with, I’ve got along with good.  
When something’s happened to them – they got careless, trusted someone
they shouldn’t of, did something they’re not sure of?   Then they hadda go away?   I been, you know, sorry for them.   Hoped whatever happened to them, not… too
bad.   They didn’t have much pain.   Nothing I could do – ‘cept wish they’d been
more careful.   But still, I did feel
sorry.   Bad they hadda go away.   Nino, I did not.   Very careless man.   Loud about it, too.   Full of the big talk.   Now Nino’s in Walpole – I’m right?   Will be a long time.   Don’t wanna be there with him.   Always figured him for trouble.   Never liked the guy.

     [ At
End of Day , 2000]

Here’s
one from Elmore Leonard:

     If it was ten or twelve years ago, and
Jimmy told Tommy Bucks in those words, ‘Handle it,’ that would be a different
story.  I mean, back when he first came
over.  Tommy’s a Zip.  You know what I mean?  One of those guys they used to import from Sicily to handle the
rough stuff.  Guy could be a peasant
right out of the fucking Middle Ages, looks around and he’s in Miami Beach . 
Can’t believe it.  They hand the
Zip a gun and say, ‘There, that guy.’ 
And the Zip takes him out.  You
understand?  They import the kind of guy
likes to shoot.  He’s got no priors here,
nobody gives a shit, he gets picked up, convicted, put away.  If he does, you send for another Zip.  Guy comes over from Sicily , he’s got on a black suit, shirt
buttoned up, no tie, and a cap sitting on top of his head.  That was Tommy Bucks, ten, twelve years ago.

     [ Pronto ,
1993]

 

There’s
a trick to it.  It’s not actually real
speech.  If you sound it out loud to
yourself, you hear the cadence.  It
mimics real speech, but the rhythms are compressed, or stretched out and exaggerated.  The language feels authentic, even if nobody really talks like that.  You wish they did. 

Twain has
the hang of this, too.   The way Huckleberry Finn sounds, the
mouth-feel.   A very good case can be made
for Twain as the first American writer who’s trying to give you a sense of genuine
vernacular speech, and what you hear with George Higgins and Dutch Leonard is a
kind of shortcut to that.   It doesn’t
sound labored ; it sounds natural . Read
the opening scene of The Friends of Eddie
Coyle , Higgins’ first book.   I’m not
going to quote the whole thing here.   You
can hear the guy’s voice in your head, at least I can.   Pick up Leonard’s LaBrava and read it for the third
time.   If it’s the first, settle in.

There’s
something comforting about their work, both of them.   And immediately familiar.   Like the guy a couple of stools down.   You know you’re in good hands, and you can go
with it.  

“She
made up a story, that Joe Young stole her stepdad’s Model A and abducted
her.   I told her, stay with that, and you
won’t go to jail.   But then the
newspapers got hold of it.   ‘Girl-friend
of Pretty Boy Floyd Guns Down Mad-Dog Felon.’  
After a while she got over it.”

“And
you married her.”

“Not
till she grew up.”

[ Up in Honey’s Room , 2007] Seriously.   If you haven’t been in the neighborhood
lately, stop by.